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Waiting by AzeeraTheNinja Waiting by AzeeraTheNinja
So, I'm trying to see how serious my artwork can get...
Did this in about 2-3 hours, and I'm horrible at backgrounds. XD

So... this is what I want feedback on.

1. Mostly the face. I tried a tutorial, and I'm not sure how it turned out. <<"" And the hair too since I'm not sure what to do with it. most of you guys that's seen my recent works know that I've been experimenting hair, so how is this?

2. The Lighting. Not sure if the light rays are okay... and where the light touches are, not sure. I thought if I softened it too much it'd just look like a blob of light so... yeah. XD

3. How do I add more depth to this picture?
Like, you know how there's a vanishing point in most pictures, should I have done that with this?

4. Textures.
I usually either soften my shading, or I leave it solid, not sure how to do different textures on Corel...

And that's it!

Hope you guys like it! :)
:heart: Allyson
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Yay I'm glad you set forth to create more work! I like the basic concept and the color palette. :la:

CONCEPT:
The concept is very straightforward. A character is alone, looking at the only light source left: the lamp post. I'm not sure if you meant for this to have much meaning, but it usually suggests loneliness or a need for understanding. The message can be very strong if played out well.

LINES:
A lot of your work has this problem: thick, messy lines. These kinds of lines are perfect for the sketching process, but have to be cleaned with a thin brush and clean lines. Leaving these sketch lines distract the viewer from what's truly presented. However, you can play with line weight; watch out though, line weight is hard to master and can make your work look very weird for a while.
I suggest line art tutorials for this portion.

ANATOMY:
You don't use a base sketch for your work most of the time. Trying to get it right from the start is something to complicated to do yet. Start with basic shapes and then build the muscle around it. I'd emphasize this tutorial [link] for torso drawing, and even [link]
Then, your legs are two thin. The folded one is longer than the other. I have a technique to maintain length; I'll show it to you later!
I'll also make a redline of the body (it won't be perfect, but it might help).

CLOTHES:
WARNING: I have no experience with clothes yet (so this is based on sight).
Hat - If you tilt your head, you can see the hat is tilted too far over the head.
Scarf - Doesn't flow in the air naturally. Seems like both ends are on one side. Based on the hair, they should be pretty weighed down. P:
Jacket - Seems very stiff and doesn't fall down naturally. No folds show either.
Pants - Folds! :la:
TUTORIALS FOR FOLDS & CLOTHES:
[link] [link] (these two are AMAZING)
[link] (this one is more for ideas)
I think you'll have to do clothing studies to do more fashion-oriented designs. :meow: It's well worth it!

PERSPECTIVE:
You'll have to get someone specialized for this, but I think there's a problem with the street and direction lamp post is facing. P:

LAMP POST:
My main concern is based on the pillar's thickness. The lighting system weighs a lot, so the poll should be thicker because of that and possibly driving accidents.

COLORS:
Can't help hear... D:

All in all, I think you are doing great! If you have time, you should redraw the piece today after reading the tutorials. :meow:

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Hatmanlives Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
For the lighting: I would continue the rays all the way to the ground, fading as they go, but not completely. So it forms, like, a triangle/cone kinda shape. I like the way the light shows up on her clothes, that looks really cool :D

I think the hair looks fine, and I'm not that good with faces :/

For depth, I guess you could make a silhouetted background of buildings or something. I'm not really one for backgrounds either, but that's mostly because I draw by hand.

Textures? Again, I don't really use drawing programs. :$

Anyway, I really like the drawing in general, and the message it seems to give. Nice job :D
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AzeeraTheNinja Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012  Student Interface Designer
Ah okay! Thanks :)

Haha, okay XD

Oh, buildings is a good idea actually! I think I might do that for next time :meow:

XD

Thanks a bunch! And also for your feedback :)
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Hatmanlives Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Not a problem :D
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Wistful-Night Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Hey! This is really good! Even so, don't give up on your style to go straight to realism:noes:
My suggestions would be for the face, put the eyes back a little farther- it may be just the thick lines, but it looks like the eyes are sitting on the sides of the bridge of her nose. Maybe add a curve of light onto the cheek as well.
The lighting coming out of the lamp would most likely look better drawn in circular motions around the head rather than straight lines coming from it.
There will be wrinkles behind the knees, and maybe you could make the contrast between light and dark a little more prominent?
Hope it helps^^;
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AzeeraTheNinja Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2012  Student Interface Designer
Haha, well I'm trying the two extremes (my anime driven style and realism) and then when I can I'm going to mix the two. :giggle:

Ahh, I see what you mean for the eyes, I didn't even think of it like that. XD

That sounds good for the light! I'll be sure to try that the next time I draw light!

Okay, wrinkles and contrast! :)

You helped a LOT! Thank you! :heart:
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Wistful-Night Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Cool! Sounds like a good plan with the styles!

And glad I could help:huggle:
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AzeeraTheNinja Featured By Owner Jan 19, 2012  Student Interface Designer
Yeah, I'm really hoping that I can make my style a bit more... appealing. XD

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LeonardX10 Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I don't know why but i just really like this one it's hard to explain.
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AzeeraTheNinja Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2012  Student Interface Designer
Haha, I'm glad you do! :giggle:
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