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'Apparently' Song WIP

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VERSE 1
(beat idea/example:
quarter - dotted.quarter - eighth - quarter - little linger rest before next line <<"
The - lights - are - dim - ...
quarter - quarter - quarter - quarter - dotted.quarter - eighth - quarter
And - these- walls - are - clo - sing - in)

The lights are dim...
And these walls are closing in.
I feel the wrath...
Of all my unforgiving sins.

Apparently... I can't understand what to do,
where-to-go
where-to-hide

Apparently... I don't know
how-to-deal
with-it-all,

little bridge thing that changes the beat to the chorus beat
No, not anymo-o-ore

chours (a little more held out on each note and a little louder and more... energy/emotion?)
These lies keep
Creeping i-in.

*and that's all I got >.<"" *
EDIT (after rereading it)
okay, I hate it, I'll scrap this later

/EDIT

First, THIS IS NOT THE SONG I'VE BEEN TALKING ABOUT.

I made this up in about 30-40 minutes tonight... I need to sleep XD

And that other song is more developed than this one, I just opened up the submit page and started typing and this came out, so I'll probably look at this tomorrow and go "this sucks" and scrap it XD

REAL song I've been talking about is coming soon.

And sorry, I tried to describe the beat but it didn't work >.<
This is more for a softer voice and feel until the chorus, which I'm still working on.
(I hate that bridge... I need more to that, and I like how the chorus begins, but I don't know what else to add to it D: )

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platinummyr's avatar
I definitely don't get the rhythm part. But there are ways I could sing this. I like it :)